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You ask me to make the bed
& unsure into what, I take the mountains of blankets of sheets, we skinned like a fish to meet the day, and shape them into a castle. Thick at the foundation, it rises into spires - where I poke faux windows to wave from - balance balconies on all sides, flip a corner into a drawbridge across the moat and down a small hillock to the lake edge. Here on the shore of us, I collect shells. Put them to my ear, and sway in the sounds of our surf. In and out it pulls. The ridges where your ribs lay are waves. I canoe through their crests, to the far shore, climb the mound of your pillow to the hilltop and lay back - surveying the kingdom. I did not make this - for what can we truly make, more than let - yet humbly accept, here I find myself. I lay, letting the sun re-warm the place we shared, cast rainbows through the last of the rain, that end in my chest and drift into the warm scent of last night - and the dreams that danced. Barefoot in the grass.
Spring is the country
where your border agents stamp
my passport page heart.
for dverse
Lovely. Dreamlike and sweet.
ReplyDeleteA unique take! The Japanese masters might be aghast... but we aren't Japanese masters, are we? :)
ReplyDeleteI live to make masters cringe.
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ReplyDeleteFun fantasy castle -- and hopefully based on a real unfolding love!
ReplyDelete"Spring is the country
ReplyDeletewhere your border agents stamp
my passport page heart"
My favourite verse of all... :) thanks for inspiring
Good description of love. I liked the haiku calling spring a country with border agents stamping passports. I also liked this phrase: "cast rainbows through the last of the rain"
ReplyDeleteThanks for inspiration! I'm living the haiku...
ReplyDeleteI love this line: 'Love is the pleasant surprise of where you will arrive each day'and the general dreaminess of the prose. The haiku is a pleasant surprise on its own. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is an artistic tussle in bed, if I ever did read one. I like how you’ve made your bed so you can lay down in Spring:) in Love
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful way to describe love! Ah yes....we sometimes build castles :)
ReplyDeleteThis line "for what can we truly make, more than let " I thought very interesting. Enjoyed reading this very much and the haiku is wonderful.
A beautiful write! All of your writings, are love poems, the best kind, nothing too sticky.
ReplyDeleteThis one felt a little sticky coming off the pen, so I am glad that it did not feel that way.
DeleteI love the architecture of this - the shaping, the skinning, the making of that bed and the intimacy shared~ It is a love letter written every day and night ~
ReplyDeleteNice way of putting forth your poem. A pleasant surprise every day, indeed!
ReplyDeleteThe thought of making the bed into a castle, as well as the dreams you fill it with is a very pleasant surprise... in winter I prefer to stay in bed. Made me think of my home is my castle.
ReplyDeleteAn elegant haibun that reads like a lucid dream. A creative risk incorporating metaphor in your concluding haiku--one that pays off! Great write!
ReplyDeletePalpable sensuality in this remarkable poem. Your abilities make your profile all that much clearer. I stand amazed.
ReplyDeletei loved the haiku, makes me think that love that came to visit may have a chance to stay.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is pure enchantment, love indeed can be a dreamy surprise. May you always feel the magic!
ReplyDeleteThis is a stunning write X, reading a pure pleasure.
ReplyDeleteLove is a wonderful thing and you certainly know it. This knowledge breathes out of your words.
Anna :o]
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