Saturday, September 5, 2015

Why the moon smiles


photo by dwight sipler


The moon is a sickle
in Saturn's hands, a fish hook
in Pisces throat

The moon sickle circles Saturn's hand
and all the masks have fallen
just in time to dance

The grass is wet but my bare feet find purchase
in the turning. This poem will never say everything.
I whisper each revision in the shell of your ear,
as a song guides waves to the shore,
ethereal as the light I hold
                                          loosely.

The moon crosses the night
on a hill between two thieves,
I know what I stole from you,
but what have you stolen
                                         from me?

A sickle?  
              I am reaped
A hook?    
                      I am caught
A dance?   
                            Sharp as well.

But the moon?

She's just as deviant as the rest of us
a pruriently prying person;
                               one who likes
                                             to watch.



39 comments:

  1. The moon is often witness to events which take place in the darkness of the night.. an inspiring piece! Beautifully penned :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  2. I know what I stole from you, what have you stolen from me ~ great lines, perhaps a bit of the self is lost in a relationship, as the moon smiles over us ~ as mystical as she can be.

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  3. Ah, the moon has served as inspiration since...well, forever! This poem, well, it will say what the poet want it to say - and what the reader wants to read. Hope that the only thing stolen was inspiration, as we can all live with that. Have a good weekend!

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  4. This is an interesting play between so many tropes--the moon, a kind of calvary, the dance, a you who is like a lover and sometimes almost like a sea--the moon--and you dance between more traditional and modern ways of being too--always keeping your balance. k.

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  5. Lovely piece, which I found more complex than it seemed at first. The moon has always seemed to me to be unattainable and aloof. Not the sort who would smile at what she sees. But perhaps you see her secret self, watching and smiling at us and our ways. Liked pisces throat and the reference to calvary.

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  6. Whisper each revision in the shell of your ear... I'm going to hold this line close for a while.. also hold it against all of life.. beautiful!

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  7. ah! the moon is as cunning as fox sometimes and as soothing as balmy air on a mountain........................

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  8. I think the moon can be trusted not to reveal our secrets.

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  9. moon has an advantageous position to be an eternal watcher & be whatever we want Him/Her to be...

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  10. What a clever use of personification and introspection...i love how you pick each word apart..show us the outside of the poem..lead us into it...i would imagine like holding a pen the moon can smile when s/he looks over the world..and yes, i think we all have the capacity to be deviant..the world would be very dull if not!

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  11. This poem will never say everything...

    There is so much to express between the planets and the grass beneath our feet.. how can a poet hope to say all that is in her/his heart?

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  12. The first three lines, in my mind I conjured up a scene based off on that. I then went to the end and read it back to the beginning.
    To watch, one who likes...

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  13. This is fantastic. So rich and deep. Gorgeous writing!

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  14. I have to confess I didn't like 'pruriently prying' - seemed like overkill - but I loved the rest!

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    1. Always good to be honest. Its the definition of voyeur from the Webster dictionary which I felt was playfully poetic for a dictionary.

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  15. This poem feels simultaneously playful and deeply dark at the same time - that feeling of danger and staying right on the edge. "This poem will never say everything" is a great line.

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  16. ...so much more, and nothing at all. You leave me with more questions than answers. But the moon doesn't kiss an tell

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  17. Yes...like the moon, we are driven to observe.
    Sometimes we can learn much from our scrutiny...but at others, the resultant comparisons can be damaging.
    I found this amazing poem deep, dark, and spell-binding...and the notion of how we steal from each other...well...so universally true! :)

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  18. Oh! Such an active metaphor in an active poem--I was so surprised--to the point of saying "no!" to placing the "moon" as a watcher rather than a participant! But I don't mind surprises, and I see the truth in this. And I think Shakespeare characterizes the moon thus in Juliet's description--"Oh swear not by the inconstant moon ..." And, of course, the "I" is still a thief. What an amazing use of this image.

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  19. Oh my! I'm hooked to this poem ;). You've used the image of a crescent moon so incisively!

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  20. Hard to pick any line or sequence out of the whole here, and I am not much of a quoter-back, but this just smacked me:
    "The moon crosses the night
    on a hill between two thieves,
    I know what I stole from you,
    but what have you stolen
    from me?"
    Every moment of love, one wonders this, I think, even when one thinks one is pondering the giving and the free passage of thought and emotion... love is such a messy operation, and so very often, the patient dies...anyway, forgive my very personal interpretation--this may be one my very favorites you have ever written.

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  21. The moon might be a silent watcher, but maybe in our heart it can be like a mirror for our heart.. I actually like to see the smile of that watcher.

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  22. Its those whispers that are so powerful and need to be listen to.

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  23. i love how the moon can be so many different things - a voyeur - she surely is as well but then she pulls and pushes the tides with just her smile as well... love the dancing barefoot, the stealing from each other but then - love gives back thousandfold as well... a beautiful piece

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  24. That first stanza, that closing line with alliteration and wow!

    mindlovemisery

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  25. "I whisper each revision in the shell of your ear." So lovely, this moon poem!

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  26. I do love that there is so much each of us can read in to your poem...we each get our own message from the moon....but the moon as a deviant is wonderful....yes she watches and never speaks all she sees....thankfully!

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  27. Ah ... that closing. I have often looked up at the moon following a discombobulating bout of human interaction and thought the same.

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  28. Hmm.. instead of words.. my friend X..
    how about.. some moon wide WAKE..
    AND Shakira.. oh.. the mythological
    SHE WOLF.. says it all to me..
    'Moon's awake now..
    EYES WIDE OPEN'..
    and when IT
    fully breathes
    Love
    RISES
    AND FALLS..
    AND RISES AGAIN..;)

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=booKP974B0k

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  29. http://www.whitewolfpack.com/2011/07/legend-of-she-wolf-of-tsla-wat.html

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  30. You know I have read a lot about the moon poems but yours is stellar X, just punching the right questions and leaving us with no answer ~ I admire that you hold moon's light loosely & let it run with your imagination from the sickle to the dance ~

    Opening lines just hooked me right away ~

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  31. oh, i love this! tantalizing and teases the tongue as you read it.
    i am enamored with the moon, what superb writing!

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  32. the moon births a lot of creativity from us, doesn't it? love your spirit!

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  33. A very interesting take on Luna as a person.

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