Thursday, June 11, 2015

The attitude jazz takes ---

photo by jimmy baikovicious


TOO HOT  _   TOO HOT  _   TOO HOT
TO HOOT       TO HOOT       TO HOOT

A car, a man, a maraca,
a butt tuba,
                    Gabe’s on a nose bag

Air an Aria
                                  A – LU – LA
                                  A – LU – LA

We few
we panic in a pew ---
                                  deified

                                  Dogma; I am god,
                                  never even or odd
                                                           --- I prefer pi

won't lover's revolt now?!

Stop!
Murder us not,
tonsured rumpots

TOO HOT    _   TOO HOT    _   TOO HOT
TO HOOT         TO HOOT         TO HOOT 

Egad! A base life defiles a bad age

                                           --- Emu love volume

37 comments:

  1. Indeed too hot!! Reminds me of the hot Indian summer we are facing currently, everything seems burning.

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  2. Palindrome Poetry - every line, or group of lines reads the same forward and backward. Because I make things harder than they need to be. Ha.

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  3. Very clever. One which I had to analyze a bit to see the palindromes. Smiles. Some very interesting lines -- liked 'air an aria' and smiled at 'a butt tuba.' But meaning --- I missed that if it was there. Smiles.

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    1. Very little actually, in the way of meaning. As I was working on it and playing with palindromes, I started to hear a bit of a jazz beat in them -- and often as much as the words get lost in a song and the a song becomes what you feel as you hear it -- that is what this became to me. More sounds poetry than anything.

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    2. And the sounds worked well. I could feel the beat.

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    3. Thanks Mary. This is one I think I could perform and it come across better than it would upon the page. I think it would be fun to drop it in with some sax flutters and some jazzy drums. Maybe even multiple voices like the poetry ensemble Cin Salach and TenTongues.

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  4. Lots of word play here. Toot his own horn - the jazz band. Ew, We-p, Dogma=(I)=I am god. 't lover (revolt=reading backwards). Stop! Murder us not = shaven headed = tonsured rumpots backwards, and the last line ---Emu lov=reading backwards =volume. Clever and a lot of it is still Greek to me, lol! Wow! Whew!

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  5. This is really cool the rhythm, it has style!

    mindlovemisery

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  6. I found the same list you did. Cheater, cheater, thumbkin eater.

    I do really like these: "Air an Aria" and "I prefer pi" (anytime you can stick in some math, it makes me happy) ... and air; I always need air (plus music) to survive. Jazz, a sax, calligraphy on napkins, ice in a fool's glass and those cute little straws that never quite deliver as much liquid as you need.

    What is the prompt, exactly? Does the whole thing have to be written in palindromes? Or can it just be partial?

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  7. The most striking element in your poem is the rhythm. I can almost hear the music in the background.

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  8. You took this to the next level, twisting the words too in the line ~

    Somehow the word play like TOO HOT, TO HOOT, and Air an Aria, and
    A – LU – LA, made for an interesting rhythm ~ Well done, with your distinctive style, smiles ~

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  9. A striking level.. go full palindrome...

    Björn

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    1. Had to go back to back and read again..

      we panic in the pew

      After all that hooting I think that is likely to happen.

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  10. A palindrome, how nice. It takes lots of thinking to get them right. Not many words can be done that way!

    Hank

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  11. Man, this is brilliantly complex. jazz riffs, beat poetics, beyond the Full Monty to the Full Palindrome; mirrored palindromic sentences, stanzas running naked & wild. It is damn-defintely a piece that needs to be read aloud, to be voiced & performed. I bow down in reverence; wish I had written it.

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  12. You took the palindrome to another level, X. I really like Glenn's comment and wish I could steal it. It does have a jazz riff feel to us and wants to be heard as well as read. Howerer, I have to mull over the whole butt tuba thing. :0)

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  13. Whew...a great one...you did it with words too...wowzers

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  14. What a fun take on this prompt. As I am dyslexic, it took me a few reads to "get it". when I "got it", I thoroughly enjoyed and smiled like a crazed imp while reading.

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  15. A musical palindrom poem! It took me longer to figure it out and it's great..I like 'never even or odd'..

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  16. OMG, X, this is an awesome way of writing. Love, cat.

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  17. I find a lot of random meaning in these odd notes and jams--very jazz-like in that it is music gone math, cerebral, yet beneath, the rhythm is purely from the senses--thanks for the clues about palindromes--they added much to the richness of the piece, and sort of show that nonsense can wisdom and vice versa. My very favorite is that 'stop murder us not (with your) tonsured trumpets'--love that image, backwards and forwards.

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  18. Cleverly cool palindromes...with an attitude, for sure!

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  19. there def is a jazz feel to this and hey - i could dig out my sax and play along..
    and now tell me - wihat do you bribe the words with that they're just like wax in your hands... i'm in awe...

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  20. (:..!Hoots.. Play Owl.. of hot.. Jazz.. hoots.. powerful horns
    blazing brightly Orleans New..
    New Orleans brightly blazing..
    horns powerful.. hoots.. Jazz.. hot of.. Owl Play.. Hoots!..:)

    PS.: Absolutely 'thrilled'.. by your out-of..the-box approach to
    Palindromes here..!.. perhaps.. thrilled is a little too strong..
    super cool is just right..;)

    And by the way.. i'll be waiting for 'that drink'.. after
    i go over a thousand..;)

    ..coming later.. as yes.. it takes time..;)

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  21. Quite clever..well done! Encore!

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  22. Ah. Very sweet as well as music! Would be great to hear you read it. k.

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  23. PS - I love tonsured rumpots! ha. k.

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  24. omg-- just caught the palindromes! Terrific. So jazzy. I love the opening/close and the alleluias. As they are. Wonderful. k.

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  25. Love me some jazz... it's been a while since I sat and really listened. And bravo on the palindromes.... just thinking of attempting that makes my brain hurt a little. :)

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  26. Wow...this took me awhile to break down the palindrome code! Fun read.

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  27. ah to be a genius X marks the spot, tops !!

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