Wednesday, June 3, 2015

Outer spaces

photo by Tori Lindstrand


The moon watches you undress each night,
the sun as you prepare for the day

& I spend too much time
being envious
                        --- of heavenly bodies.

41 comments:

  1. You even crammed a lot of meaning in your very effective title. We all waste our time being envious when we should be saving our energies for more productive and beneficial activities. It's the curse of the aesthete, I suppose, feeling wistful over nature and such.

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  2. So lovely and sensual..ah to be the moon or the sun would be heavenly...

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  3. I never want to grow so old that I cannot revel in your words ~~

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  4. The visual is perfection. Blue for the moon. Red for the sun. Green for your envy. Plenty of room for other color droplets to
    expand.
    mix.and
    swirltogetherasnewcombinations.
    Beautiful.

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  5. Hahaha! Love your sense of humour! :D

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  6. Those three heavenly bodies. Love the double meanings of of your lines.

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  7. The perfect love poem within a short form as free as the wind. A fine example of the Romantic poets, with the between the lines wink from your contemporary side. If you liked Scene 40 of my Cinemagenic Western series, BLACKTHORNE, there are 39 previous poems in my archives to keep up your interest. I used to be an actor, & I'm a life-long movie buff. I wrote an existential Western novel in 1968, & it remains unpublished; so I'm making a movie out of it.

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  8. this is so beautifully expressed... and there are a thousand ways to express our love to someone... and we cannot say it often enough...when i sat on the bench by the stream today, jesus sat next to me and said "i love you" and even though i knew i just wanted him to say it again and again...

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  9. A lot of fun and very sensual too--thanks, X. k.

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  10. Succinct and well worded. >KB

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  11. At once eerie, and passionate, the layers of need. Well done.

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  12. I love your handle, it reminds me of a masked horseman.

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    1. If I change it to Z, all the more then eh?
      Zorro is one of the original heroes - I probably need to work on my acrobat skills though, to land on the horse from the second story.
      And get a very sturdy horse.

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  13. Lyrical beauty in so few perfectly chosen words.

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  14. Funny and surprising punchline!

    And thanks so much for entering this week's Limerick-Off. I hope you'll be a frequent participant in my weekly limerick challenges. With your sense of humor, you should do well.

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  15. You've packed a lot into a few words. I sense an undertone of sadness, regret. Though apparently others saw humor in the same words that revealed this to me. Peace, Linda

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  16. I sort of felt like a voyeuse reading this. Beautiful expression. XYZ!
    I wonder why Google won't let me post with my Wordpress blog. It won't give me the code.

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  17. Such voyeuristic planets! So much in these few words - the different beauty of the sun and moon and the envy of us poor humans who will never match it.

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  18. I agree--quite beautiful. We'll see if my comment will post this time....

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  19. Very well done! Love the artwork you chose to write about, it worked so well with your words.

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  20. Wow...such beauty evoked...in so few words.
    This is really amazing...it reminded me we are never truly alone...;)

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  21. This is sweet and cheeky at the same time love it!

    mindlovemisery

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  22. Your poem and pen name are minimalist but effective. I appreciate your artful, thoughtful, and playful interpretation here!

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  23. Lovely and beautiful and it made me smile!
    Anna :o]

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  24. nice double entendre on that "heavenly bodies". A humourous, and maybe just a tad naughty piece :-)

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  25. I'm a huge fan of brevity in poetry and this delivers just that. Impactful prose. Thanks for sharing your words!

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    1. I visited your three line site today. I am intrigued and will have to play next week.

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  26. Great job! You make us smile ~ heavenly bodies make us smile too!

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  27. If only we had celestial vision... Oh, the possibilities.

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  28. One is just an innocent bystander to witness in awe! It's too far away but still look nice!

    Hank

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  29. You conveyed a lot through a simplicity that reminds me of zen imagery. I also smiled at the play on words at the end. In the end only love can make you feel your body is heavenly.

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  30. I wish I'd written this. Pure perfection... Nothing more I can say, honestly.

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  31. A few lines but they say so much..............beautiful composition.

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  32. Well, first of all I enjoyed the double meaning here. Ha, I think we all might be a bit envious of 'heavenly bodies.' Secondly, I enjoyed the romance... The moon and the sun always do seem to have the best view.

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  33. must be the end of the alphabet thing. you and Mama Zen are master at brevity ~

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