Sunday, June 7, 2015

Mama Kin

photo by brett jordan


She's an origami dragon,
             so soon consumed
                              - in her own fire

reborn every morning
        of wind-tossed ash

& folded with precise creases,
    so tight
               oxygen & light
               are kept from the truths
               inscribed on her inmost

                                     paper

so soon consumed
                       - in her own fire

& our relief -
            as the blisters of her passing

                                         --- crack.


46 comments:

  1. Wonder what secrets she keeps in her folds..in a cavern of passion a fire will always burn.. from paper to ash, from ash to rebirth..a dragon will always be a dragon...holding mystical powers...

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  2. Loved it! Nothing like a poem about an origami dragon with an inflammability problem.
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  3. Whoa... an origami dragon sounds intriguing :D loved this poem!!!

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  4. Your poem is a visual feast, with imagery to rival that of any artist. I do admire your style!

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  5. A super creative image/metaphor, X. Thanks. k.

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  6. Just purely beautiful........................sometimes we to our consumed in by hatred and selfish desires but we can overcome those..........................

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  7. oxygen & light
    are kept from the truths
    inscribed on her inmost

    This is wonderful!

    mindlovemisery

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  8. Ha. You are hilariously clever. Seriously. I can't stop laughing.

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    1. I totally left you an Easter egg in this one.

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    2. And a colorful one, at that!

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    3. Mama Kin - The first hit song by the Rolling Stones, also the first song of theirs that included a curse word in the lyrics ---

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    4. You mean Aerosmith. But I'm more of a G&R girl. ~Nirvana, if you wanna get right down to it.

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    5. You are totally right, I saw the promo for the RS tour at the movies today and my head must have gone there. Also went to the longest GNR concert ever --- 6.5 hours. Was amazing. Pearl Jam - an all time fav. Have a copy of Cobain's diary, some pretty crazy stuff in there.

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    6. Oh, wow. That's rad! My favorite concerts were Poe (S.A.) and Ani Difranco (Austin). I'll have to look for that diary; sounds interesting. ... Oh wait, I totally saw Tenacious D and Weezer in S.A. too. Now that was fun. Candlebox was another good one. I also saw some ska band that was awesome. And this No Doubt cover band called C5 that this guy and I used to follow around to all the dive bars where they played. Man, I miss concerts and smoky rooms oozing with drool and music.

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    7. Nice. I have done stage crew and security for a few bands: Offspring, Disciple, Hawk Nelson. There is a local place that does screamo concerts a couple times a month and I go every once in a while, mainly to hang out with my students.

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  9. That last crack is haunting...very skilfully written

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  10. I think the secrets in the heart of an origami dragon has to be scary enough for us to sigh in relief when she consume herself in fire, but secrets never really disappear do they?

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  11. This whole thing is stunning. Your writing is always something I look forward to.....you have such an astounding way with words....drawing images into the reader's mind and pulling emotions out of our hearts like we are puppets on strings. Wow. Breathtaking, as always.

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  12. ha - i'm probably way off but to me that sounds like the visit of some relative that you are happy to show the door after a bit...oy.... maybe it's just me - i have an aunt like that - forgive me... smiles

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  13. Wow, a rather "blistering" description. LOL. I so admire your style! Love that she is reborn every morning.

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  14. I love dragons...such amazing creatures and the image of the origami red dragon was fabulous...as were your words although I wonder if it was a dragon you were really writing about.

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  15. Ooo...this causes my skin to goose-flesh rise...I love the way you've employed metaphors and the extent of origami you've folded into this poem...really intense piece!! :)

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  16. An origami dragon consumed in her own fire kind of saddens me. I wish she could have survived & that her truths would be known and accepted. Cool poem really!

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  17. Wonderful, evocative and layered writing. Simply: an awesome poem!

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  18. Fantastic image that a paper dragon gets consumed by its own fire... works at so many levels!

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  19. Mama Kin, as all tired out mom's may well flare forth during the day, hide the secrets of her heart, crack and then be reborn every morning.

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    1. I, too, thought the title looked like Mom Achin'.

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  20. I too love dragons, but especially those who keep secrets in the folds of their creases,

    Elizabeth

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  21. so it's better 'Keepin' touch with Mama Kin.'... :)

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  22. Dragon and phoenix in one! Have to love this arresting poem, for all sorts of reasons - not least that my personal Pagan path involves both dragon and phoenix.

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  23. Are we not all consumed in our own fire? What we feel ourselves burning for can be so destructive and can bring on its own demise. Love this one. Many interpretations, but I am busy with my own 'crime and punishment' poems today.

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  24. Great imagery and tone all throughout. the origami dragon represents despite being a fragile, she is not tame for most of the times

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  25. That particular crack dragon has flown the coup around here, now it's fentynal laced heroin. Actually in 18 months has killed 3 of my needle using friends or their kids. that dragon can take herself off to hell.

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  26. I love the repetition of consumed in her own fire.

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  27. Feeling kind of compassion to her...what the secrets she hides in the creases... what the unfolded expectations get burn every time....what the personal tragedy behind the crack...why couldn't she find the equal opponent...very intriguing short story/poem!

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  28. Wow. You really know how to weave words that pierce and burn. Great story of an origami dragon, but I don't think I'd like her to burn me. Really good writing here!

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  29. A passionate life live fully each day.

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  30. way better than my (old) pen on origami. brilliant, really ~

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  31. I love the embedded "wind-tossed dash." And this: "so tight oxygen & light are kept from the truths inscribed on her inmost paper." Gorgeous.

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  32. Vivid insights, like ink tattooed unto the skin. Really splendid stuff.

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