Monday, June 15, 2015

An American selfie


picture by tim gears


A boy and a girl.

She's a mess of curls & a tulle dress,
mid calf & stark white above a rainbow of socks,
ruffle top boots -
                             & orange ram horns
                             twisting out
                             the sides of her head

He's ordinary,
             & could be any of us
            @ that age - uncool & thin
             in the way it is popular
                                             - these days

She & her beau stand close,
       not on top
                                of each other,
       together            - in a way few other
       under                stand


They sing
            in clicks, whistles & moans,
            dolphins & whales
            beached

on the cold tile of the mall,
in all the backlit names
& clearance posters,
                                    Abercrombie,
                                    plastic,
                                    bag carrying people

authentic
in every possible way.


27 comments:

  1. I really want that outfit. Like, a lot.

    Great title. Great pic. Great poem. I love that thing you do with the oversized caps, always adding a little something extra to your piece. The way you played with the "she and her beau stand close" stanza is my favorite part. And the one after that. And the closing. Nevermind; it's all impressive. I'm sure your masses of followers will agree, so I'll leave it to them now.

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    1. Ah, I gave up the masses for the few & much happier for it.

      Thanks Orphan, you'll have to let me know where you are these days. What an interesting show that is as well.

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    2. I don't know; you seem to be racking up the numbers here as well. When you're good, they'll follow you anywhere.

      It IS an awesome show. I'm addicted to Homeland these days.

      Oh, and I'm just private these days. Saying whatever rolls out without worrying about what people might think. We both know I can't actually write poetry, so I give up. I'm going full-on crazy, with only me watching.

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    3. Way too much emphasis on 'teeming masses' these days. I prefer being one of the select few. Huge grin.

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    4. You should totally read a book called Horns, by Joe Hill. Heard of it? You would love it.

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    5. Joe Hill - very nice, you know he is the son of Stephen King, right? I have a couple of his, Heart shaped box is a book of short stories, ibelieve. I know I have one full length novel of his too.

      Shoot OB, I enjoy your poetry - may enjoy your crazy too. Ha. Let me in, let me in (Even though I have hair on my chinny chin chin.)

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    6. No, I did NOT know that. You just blew my head off with that fun tidbit; I am so excited to have accidentally discovered him, even more so now. Seriously, I found that book for a buck with all the other treasured rejects at a local dollar store. I'll have to look for more of him. That's the thing, though: They tease me with a fantastic cheapo book, but then I have to (over)pay for more ... which, if you knew me, you'd realize is not gonna happen. I do not do Abercrombie or full priced books. I'm a total thriftster. I can deny myself all day long if it means I'm saving something back.

      My crazy is pretty damn good, if you ask me. But that's only because no one's watchin' ... wolf, or otherwise.

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  2. Ah.. you show me them standing there, in teenage pose... I see so much more freedom for the guy to be cool without looking like he is, while she has to spend all that effort.. very observant portrait (I think I know someone who it could be... so the selfie could work well in Sweden too).

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  3. Love the Abercrombie bag line ....

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  4. I feel a bit disconnected at the end of this, as if I've watched a documentary on aliens--that's most likely because I haven't been in a mall since the 90's. ;_) Still, in the tension between these two there is something archetypical, perhaps even eternal, that outsiders just will not really get unless they are in the same story. Your powers as a chronicler of all kinds of human permutations just grows stronger, and never lacks insight or compassion.

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    1. Oh but the malls are full of the most interesting people - and very few stores these days. In many ways most are like monuments to a time before. Maybe 3 times a year, I go, and never at Christmas - unless I am just feeling masochist.

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  5. Authentic in every possible way seems the exact opposite of Abercrombie. Smiles.

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    1. Oh, I have a treat for you tomorrow Mary.

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  6. did you know that abercrombie is a city in scotland - and i literally had a look at a world map, checking which country probably looks like that girl in your description - ha - maybe it's just the old story that opposites attract - i sense a certain peace in their relationship - it is sad though when plastic bags carry people instead the other way round - consuming things never make anyone really happy - and i refuse to wear brands generally...

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  7. A common site everywhere these days, but you bring it out with such deep heartfelt emotions that everything seems special in its on way.

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  8. Oh, I have added you to my Feedly reader so I won't miss your posts
    Smiles ... Take care now!

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    1. Sorry, I have to delete your other comment as - my mask slipped there just a bit. Ha.

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  9. Vivid and all too accurately drawn. Really good write.

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  10. You have a way of describing the everyday - I can see the boy & girl together against all the backlit names & clearance posters ~ Authentic, I have to smile at the irony ~ And a very interesting title, smiles ~

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  11. The fringe perhaps or the fringe looking in. Doesn't matter, my mind is having great fun playing with the parts this poetic doll. Very good shtuffs, you.

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  12. not on top
    of each other,
    together - in a way few other
    under stand

    Wow how beautifully expressed is this, magnificent capture

    mindlovemisery

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  13. I really loved this write - typical (I imagine) American teens. She developing her own style and he acting as if he doesn't give a hoot, but aware that he fits in with the rest. Loved the bag of people, lol!

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  14. Oh lord how we have limited the possibilities. We'll leave your grandpappy's generation alone, but my generation screwed it u for you and now it's getting even more twisted as you guys take over. Too bad jack Ruby shot Lee Harvey Oswald--that was our first taste of reality------television. From there we though that was the way the world worked.

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  15. As I have always said you have a keen eye - truly a man who understands and looks for the bigger picture inside the smaller picture. The mall can be a great place to sit and people watch. So many with a story and sometimes when I am sitting on a bench someone will sit next to me and tell me their story. I always find it amazing and they will say I am not sure why I am telling you this, but I know why I was there for a purpose to help them in the journey. The boy and girl are symbolic in many ways. Trying to fit in, without losing their identity can be difficult.. Walking to - gether in a way few understand...brilliant capture...ha plastic bag carrying people...reality can be difficult to distinguish...what has happened to individualism? It is better to walk to your own drumbeat I think?

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  16. your stories only yours are everyone's but me..I understand

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