Friday, June 5, 2015

A rose, by any other name


photo by nattu


A hot summer day & an ice cube,

a lone stiff feather
                     --- purple bleeding
                                          into blue

                                             & you.

                        ~~~


"You only get 3 wishes, silly."

"So, does this count as one wish
                                             or two?"


20 comments:

  1. Love the first stanza! The second, well, is a mystery to me. Obviously a girl speaking, not you (I think, lol).

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  2. Love the erotic image of your first list of items.. Could that even count as 4 wishes I wonder.. ;-) hope you got it all.

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  3. def. as one because we think in terms of sources and... psssshhhh... this may crash my good relationship with the fairy world but... they cannot really count..ha
    cool on weaving some shakespeare into the title...

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  4. I love this, Romeo. It says much more than the layer of sexuality would lead the reader to believe, if you consider what the items might represent. Excellent, captivating poetry. This is why I come back, again and again --- you are one of the few poets I've discovered (published-in-print or otherwise) who writes thoughtful, deep, cryptic, gripping poetry. It makes me want to have a conversation with you about your poems, not just leave a comment. But as I am here and you are there, this will have to do.

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    1. I am all for conversations. Ha.

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  5. Make it one. It will offer more options!

    Hank

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  6. I just love the way this reads, it makes me think of Anne Sexton and I adore her. I also have a craving for ice which I don't even have

    mindlovemisery

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  7. So many wishes and desires unfolding and each wish worth to die for!

    As sau\id by great poet "Mirza Ghalib" ," HAZZAR KHWAHISHEIN AISI, KI HAR KHWAHISH PE DAMM NIKLEY"!1

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  8. Restful and wistful, and some other -ful words too, kike playful, and bountiful in its very brevity--as if by limiting things one finds the ones that matter, and that make things as full as they need to be...I especially like the feather.

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  9. Intriguing title for those 3 wishes ~ Hopefully you get more than that, smiles ~

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  10. All the things needed for a summer day of pleasure...my mind is wandering...

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  11. The comma in the title adds a lot of depth to my perception --- as does the only comma you used in your wish list. This is why, in the dialogue, you playfully ask her if you've used one wish or two. On one level, you're asking for two things: the combination of what comes before the comma and then the combination of things listed after the comma. At the same time, you believe the woman and the items (along with what they represent) to be inseparable. You are describing her with all the words you've placed before "& you." The ampersand does not precisely infer "and you"; it means something more like "you, and ... all of the pieces of you, good and bad."

    This is what your list of "items" suggests to me:
    a summer's day --- you think she's "hot"
    ice --- you think she's cold, but that she easily melts, given the right heat
    a lone stiff feather --- she keeps to herself, she's hard and unbending (unless she's in the mood to be flexible), maybe she's even "dead" to some degree
    purple bleeding into blue --- this is meant to sound like it's a description of the feather's colors, but really, you're talking about her inclination to border the "blue" in conversation and thought; two kinds of blue, really, being that you left "in-t(w)o blue" hanging on its own line

    Your list (and title) also imply some-thing about you.

    ~~~

    And three squiggly sperm-lines later, you share a conversation with us. This shows us more of her personality, as she seems to speak/act in a child-like manner.

    I further think it's interesting that you chose to write "3" as a numeral but then "one" and "two" in words. To me, it means something. I've settled on the fact that a "3" is half an "8," which is a sideways infinity symbol. So she's offering you half an infinity of wishes. But this is a case in which half of something is still quite substantial, I would guess.

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    1. Fascinating - I want to write just so you can analyze me. Ha.

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    2. Then by all means, pick up your feather and write.

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  12. I like the simplicity of your work that always morphs into great meaning.

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  13. I like the simplicity of your work that always morphs into great meaning.

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  14. Ha. Very sweet and wonderful combination of dialogue and verse.

    Thanks. k.

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  15. Oh hell that isn't even the first wish unless it was pity sex. Save the wishes for important things, bail money for example. Bwahahahahaha sorry X you spend your wishes your way, i remember wishing for the rare quiet kid free moment which by your count could be all three wishes bud.

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